Six Sentence Sunday 11

This week I’m delving into a manuscript that’s been on my computer for at least five years. I’m dusting it off and getting a partial ready for a contest. The Ruined Lady is an erotic historical, written long before I was published. But it needs work so you’ll have to forgive the boo boos.

The Set Up: Carlisle Roth is a duke’s daughter who was ruined on the eve of Waterloo and has a child out of wedlock. Some years later, through a series of unusual circumstances, she’s reluctantly accepted back into society.  Nick Sterling, Duke of Ravencourt, has known and loved Carlisle since they were children.  In order for Nick to have her for his own, he and his friends must unravel the mystery of her ravishment and disappearance. However, the secrets they uncover could rend the fabric of his renewed relationship with Carlisle just as easily as they could strengthen it.

Nick felt his blood pound as he looked at her. She was startlingly beautiful in the grey mist, her face alive with happiness.  He wondered what she would do if he pulled her off the stallion and kissed her.

Something must have shown on his face because she gave a short laugh and said, “Yes, that would feel good too, but it’s not proper.”

“Since when have you been a proper miss?”

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23 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday 11

  1. I agree with everyone else; finish it. It sounds like a story that needs to be told 🙂

  2. This sounds very enticing! Glad you dusted it off!

  3. Pull her off that horse! 😉

  4. Yep, I'm with everyone else. Finish it.

  5. Liz says:

    Nice by-play between the two

  6. I sure hope you do get this one published. Would love to read it!

  7. Eleri Stone says:

    Great six and the story sounds really interesting.

  8. Thanks everyone! And just so you know…eventually, he does more than kiss her. HEH. This is going to take some serious work to make it viable for the contest and publication but I'm up to the task!

  9. jayelKaye says:

    Grab her already! Great snippet

  10. Hi Lex. This six has great interaction and intriguing characters. The conflict promises all sorts of twists and turns. Best wishes for getting this one published soon!

  11. Hi Lex! Gosh darn it, what a time to insist on propriety…

  12. Lyncee says:

    I'm hoping your next lines are of the proper kiss.

  13. Oh Lex! I love it – so glad you're dusting this off!

  14. I'm so glad you're going to work on this one. This wip is going to be a keeper!

  15. Sandi Sookoo says:

    Mmm, nice snippet!

  16. Kerrianne says:

    Great snippet! Who cares about proper? Kiss her!

  17. Graylin Fox says:

    Kiss her! Kiss her!

  18. Arlene Webb says:

    Love the last line, and how easy it is to rethink the line into, since when have you had a proper kiss? Perfect!

  19. Fallon Blake says:

    I agree with Dee. Proper or not, kiss her! Kiss her!

  20. Dee Carney says:

    Damn it. Kiss her!

  21. I love this excerpt! Glad you're working on it again. 🙂